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The first drops of golden rays wake the deeply slumbered earth Wind blows a cold breeze from the bay let the flowers dance with mirth


The first drops of golden rays
        wake the deeply slumbered earth

Wind blows a cold breeze from the bay
        let the flowers dance with mirth

Dewdrops strewn like myriad crystals
        mirror nature in a mirage

Flowers bloom with fragrant petals
        capture butterflies on espionage

Cold river constantly flows
        rushing down in a slender twist

Valleys and prairies and meadows
        reveal their splendor from the mist

Trees unfold its emerald crown
        to welcome the morning bright 


On their huge bough, I lay down
        to bask on a blitheful sight.


Created: June 16th, 2012 at 5:58am
Modified: September 1st, 2015 at 11:41am


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  1. Neeraj KumarApril 21, 2021 at 8:07 PM

    Very nice poetry

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  2. AnonymousMarch 28, 2025 at 2:33 PM

    What a beautiful and vivid poem you've created! It's like a painting crafted with words, capturing the essence of a serene and lively morning in nature. Here are some thoughts:

    Imagery: Your use of imagery is particularly striking. Phrases like "drops of golden rays" and "dewdrops strewn like myriad crystals" create vivid mental pictures that draw the reader into the scene. This level of detail is a wonderful way to immerse your audience in the world you're painting.

    Sensory Appeal: You've skillfully engaged multiple senses – the visual brilliance of the morning, the tactile coldness of the breeze, the scent of flowers. This multi-sensory approach makes the poem more immersive and engaging.

    Flow and Rhythm: The flow of your poem is smooth, with a rhythm that feels natural and unforced. This aids in conveying a sense of peacefulness and grace, which matches your subject matter beautifully.

    Theme and Mood: You've maintained a consistent theme and mood throughout the poem, celebrating the beauty and tranquility of nature. The final lines bring a sense of personal connection and contentment, adding a lovely emotional layer to the piece.

    Language and Diction: Your choice of words is both elegant and accessible, striking a balance between poetic beauty and clarity of expression.

    Suggestions for Enhancement: Consider experimenting with metaphors or similes in a few places to add depth to your descriptions. For instance, describing the river's movement with a metaphor could enhance the reader's connection to the natural elements you're depicting.

    Overall, your poem is a delightful journey through a vibrant, natural landscape. It's a testament to your ability to weave words into a tapestry of imagery and emotion. Keep nurturing this wonderful talent!

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  3. AnonymousMarch 28, 2025 at 2:33 PM

    Nicely written details and lovely reflections. First drops of golden rays. Flowers bloom with fragrant petals. Trees unfold its emerald crown. I like these lines best. Good imagery and nice descriptions. A neat rhyme pattern rounds this out and gives this a good flair. Beautifully captured.

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  4. AnonymousMarch 28, 2025 at 2:34 PM

    This is an extremely enjoyable poem. The tone is formal. It suits the subject matter very well. The poem celebrates nature and all its glory. The reader is fascinated by vivid image of nature they get as they read. The reader will read to the very last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhyme. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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